A little introduction

Nothing I say will make a whole lot of sense. None of it will fit together. A lot of it will be from the countless stories I have created in my head. All of it will be from my heart. Please, read and enjoy. Comment with ways to fix my work. Don't water down how you really feel. Be harsh. I want to be as good as I can be. Help me achieve my goal.

03 June, 2011

Just a little preview

This is actually the opening to my book. I have yet to title it so don't ask. I am hoping that I'll be looking for plublishers by the end of the month. Give me you're honest opinion on this. Do you like it?


                Wind blew through Kari Jakobson’s short purple hair as she ran, whipping it back and forth over her pale face. Trees flew by and time seemed to stand still. Campers sat around bright orange fires, oblivious as her sleek form flashed past in the dark night. Sweat beaded on her skin, her heart pounded in her chest, and her bones had begun to ache. It was almost time. The cool scent of water reached her and she stopped at a slowly drifting river. Shivers crawled up her spine and the sweet pain kicked in.
                The air sounded with pops and cracks as Kari’s bones broke and reformed, distorting her slender figure for a split second. Kari laughed with pleasure as fur sprouted from every pour on her skin. The laugh slowly turned into a rasp and a growl ripped its way up from her chest. Her gums tingled as her teeth lengthened and sharpened. She threw back her head and howled at the moon, sharing her joy with the world.
                The massive wolf stretched out her lean body, the transformation now complete. Thick ebony fur covered her muscular frame. Glowing sapphire eyes radiated pure bliss as she turned back towards the forest and ran, enjoying her freedom.
                As Kari weaved between the thick trees, she caught a familiar scent. The musky aftershave was one she would never forget. Taking a sharp left, towards the smell, she slowed to a jog.
                Soon enough, she came upon a small campsite. A black tent stood five feet from a steady fire and a young man at on a tree stump next to it. Kari stopped moving, her mouth salivating slightly but not from hunger.
                The boy’s black hair hung down just below his ears in a messy style. The thick locks hung over his face and sea-green eyes watched the flames. Jarrod Pierce. He was the new kid in school and Kari had instantly fallen for him. She wasn’t sure if it was because of the gorgeous eyes, the tanned muscles, or the heart melting smile. All she knew was that he was a hunk.
                An untimely whimper escaped from her jaws and Jarrod’s head whipped towards the sound. His eyes locked on her massive shape in the trees and a wary look crossed his face. He didn’t know what was out there but he knew it was huge. Grabbing his dad’s rifle out of the tent, he slowly walked in Kari’s direction.
                She knew she should have been running but she was locked in place. Jarrod pushed aside the brush and stopped in his tracks. He was face to face with the biggest wolf he had ever seen. He couldn’t look away from the eyes; eyes no normal wolf should have. The sapphire color jogged his memory but he couldn’t place it. Kari stepped backwards and broke the spell.
                Jarrod gasped and fell to the ground as she jumped in the air, clearing both him and the fire five feet behind him. Without a glance backwards, she ran from the place. She knew she shouldn’t have let him see her but, for the first time, he had seen her.

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